First Blog

TASK: In a poem or short prose piece describe a situation where you have either seen or experienced a dramatic difference in the state of a human being and its impact on the world around.

I was lying on my stomach in the spare room of my grandmother’s townhouse, desperately trying to complete a mathematics workbook for school. I was surrounded by several sheets of working out paper, various rubber shavings, my worn calculator and pens and pencils spread as far as the eye can see. I could hear my grandmother moving around downstairs, along with the radio playing classical music. It was a very tranquil Saturday evening.

Until the phone rang and the peace was disturbed. My grandmother quickly answered it to find one of my cousins on the other end. She had been away in Tasmania so I assumed she was calling to tell my grandmother all about her trip until I heard a huge gasp from my grandmother. I raced downstairs in case something was wrong but the scene I arrived on was anything but. My grandmother had the biggest smile on her face and her eyes absolutely sparkled – it turned out my cousin had become engaged on the top of Cradle Mountain.

The news’ effect on my grandmother was instantaneous – after all, this was my eldest cousin; her eldest grandchild who had been through a rough childhood estranged from the rest of our family. My grandmother looked like everything had fallen into place and that all the stars had aligned for her. It was as if a huge weight had been lifted off her shoulders and in that moment, I saw just what pure and unadulterated joy looked like and the effect it could have on people. My grandmother looked years younger and all the pieces of the puzzle fit. It was absolute and total bliss – all was right with the world.

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8 thoughts on “First Blog

  1. Suzanne.S says:

    Hi Felicity,

    Firstly, this is a fantastic blog! You concisely describe your surroundings and set the scene really well in the first paragraph of the blog, which is a great start and was engaging to read. The heart of this story is that you really capture the joyful moment that you and your family members experienced, and how the joy that you witnessed and experienced positively impacted you. I especially love the last two sentences of your blog: “My grandmother looked years younger and all the pieces of the puzzle fit. It was absolute and total bliss – all was right with the world”. This served as a really nice closure and at the same time seem to highlight an interesting point in your blog, which was how your grandmother looked years younger, after reading this I could sort of understand what that might mean. It seems as though joy can not only make us feel happy, but consequently make us look more happy and bright, inwardly and outwardly. It’s good that you’ve provided a bit of background information as to why your grandmother felt even more happy for your eldest cousin, which can also help the reader understand the last sentence: “all was right with the world”.

    Keep up the great work!
    Suzanne

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  2. jessicaandliterature says:

    Hi Felicity!
    Your blog for this week is so sweet. Congratulations to your cousin (although I believe some years may have passed)! Your blog is well written, and beautifully presented. I’d love to know how old you were when this happened. Your grandmother sounds so content, I’m sure she would be delighted to see you get engaged too one day (if that is your desire). Your descriptive language adds a visionary experience to the piece, as I sit here imagining the delight on your Grandmother’s face. It is wonderful to see such a personal experience expressed here. I hope you continue writing with such beautiful and emotive language in the future.
    Ta, Jess x

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